Sunshine Hotel, which is an international three - star standard integrated foreign tour hotel, is located on North Road,beijing City, which is the most prosperous political, commercial and financial center of the city. It is an ideal place in south of Beijing for tour, shopping, accommodation, dining, drinking, leisure and entertainment.
The 19-story building with a total area of 24,000 square meters has 5 meeting rooms, 1 video conference room, 1 luxury reception room, 1 multifunctional hall and 8 restaurants; each restaurant has its own style and size. The entertainment center located on the 1 floor underground has 19 luxury KTV rooms with different size. The building around the hotel, which is called Jingbailong business club, is the largest entertainment paradise with all kinds of services in Baoding area. The hotel has 157 rooms including president suit, luxury suit, standard room and single room. All rooms are furnished with internet access programme-controlled telephone, cable TV, etc.
This is very well done. There are just a few small things that I would change. It all makes sense, but your sentences are a bit long. I would also put the section that talks about the business club at the beginning, after the sentence that ends in the word 'entertainment.'
Sunshine Hotel is an international three - star standard integrated foreign tour hotel. It is located on North Road, Beijing City- the most prosperous political, commercial and financial center of the city. It is an ideal place in south Beijing for tours, shopping, accommodation, dining, drinking, leisure and entertainment.
The 19-story building with a total area of 24,000 square meters has 5 meeting rooms, 1 video conference room, 1 luxury reception room, 1 multifunctional hall and 8 restaurants. Each restaurant has its own style and size. The entertainment center located on the first underground floor has 19 luxury KTV rooms of different sizes. The building around the hotel, the Jingbailong Business Club, is the largest entertainment paradise with all kinds of services in the Baoding area. The hotel has 157 rooms including the president suite, luxury suite, as well as standard and single rooms. All rooms are equipped with Internet access programme-controlled telephone, cable TV, etc.
If only 1 then "presidential suit, luxury suit"
If more than 1 "presidential suits, luxury suits"
Not many mistakes. I changed the paragraph order because it seemed strange to start with the hotel, then the building nextdoor, then back to the hotel.
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The Sunshine Hotel is an international three star standard, integrated foreign tour hotel, located on North Road, Beijing City, the most politically prosperous, commercial and financial center of the city. It is an ideal place in the south of Beijing for touring, shopping, accommodation, dining, drinking, leisure and entertainment.
The hotel has 157 rooms including presidential suits, luxury suits, standard rooms and single rooms. All rooms are furnished with an internet access programme-controlled telephone, cable TV, etc.
The 19-story building with a total area of 24,000 square meters has 5 meeting rooms, 1 video conference room, 1 luxury reception room, 1 multifunctional hall and 8 restaurants; each restaurant has its own style and size. The entertainment center located on the first floor underground has 19 luxury KTV rooms of different sizes.
The building next to the hotel is called the Jingbailong business club and is the largest entertainment paradise with all kinds of services for the Baoding area.
1.Capitalize Beijing.
2.Change "1 floor" to "1st floor".
3.Change "different size" to "different sizes".
4.Capitalize "Internet".
5.Change "programme-controlled telephone" to "program-controlled telephone".
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